I think this senryu is pretty interesting because it can be interpreted in many different ways. Some people might interpret it as an angry mom answering the phone after it has been rang for a long period of time, she is angry because nobody bothered to answer the phone. I was not really sure what the last verb もらいません was trying to indicate here.
Maybe it would be a good idea to put English translation next to your original senryu. :)
プンプンはおもしろいonomotopeiaですね！
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I think this senryu is pretty interesting
because it can be interpreted in
many different ways. Some people might
interpret it as an angry mom answering
the phone after it has been rang for a long
period of time, she is angry because nobody
bothered to answer the phone.
I was not really sure what the last verb
もらいません was trying to indicate here.
Maybe it would be a good idea to put
English translation next to your original
senryu. :)
Thanks for your comment, SK.
ReplyDeleteThe English translation is:
There's a phone call
From angry Mom
I don't want to answer to the phone.